请问这句话有没有语法问题,my current goal is to be involved in an international company改成这样了，帮看看后面的还有什么问题吗？My current goal is to join in an international company in finance field which could provide

请问这句话有没有语法问题,my current goal is to be involved in an international company改成这样了，帮看看后面的还有什么问题吗？My current goal is to join in an international company in finance field which could provide
请问这句话有没有语法问题,my current goal is to be involved in an international company
改成这样了，帮看看后面的还有什么问题吗？My current goal is to join in an international company in finance field which could provide me with a high platform to develop myself and bring me a broad view.（想表达的意思要是提供一个高平台，开阔的视野）

请问这句话有没有语法问题,my current goal is to be involved in an international company改成这样了，帮看看后面的还有什么问题吗？My current goal is to join in an international company in finance field which could provide
原句,to be involved.不是很恰当．
改句,It 's a run-on sentence.
应该 Keep the sentence neat and sweet!
My goal is to join the finance field of an international company,which can help broaden my view.
Why?
The word "current" is not necessary.When you are making your present statement,without a doubt it would be current.So the word current is an extra because It is not important here.
"join" and "join in " would mean the same.
"in an international company in finance field" Try to use different words to make your reader excited.not "in.in."
It' also hard to understand.we want to use ".of."
"develop myself" is an unclear statement.

语法问题没有。写得还可以。意思表达也明白：我目前的愿望是想进入一家国际公司。

involve 不恰当哦，是中性词或贬义词
我觉得to be taken in 或者 recruited 或者 enrolled 来的比较恰当

involve很少这样用啦，语法错误倒没有
建议直接点，my current goal is to find a job in an international company
宁可用小词，也不要用自己不清楚用法的词

I prefer the answer as below ,My current goal is to join an international company.

没有错误...但似乎有点中式英语.......
Rightnow I aim to work in an international company./I long for working for an international company.
或者直接说 I want to work in an international company.
开阔视野：wide my mind/horizon

我觉得用FINANCIAL 更好一些

如果你是说要加入这间公司成为员工，用involve不对了
你用join in 就和用involve 一样的`不对
finance - financial 才能形容field/sector
high platform - 英语没这说法， - 你要表达什么？高平台？高台？
my present goal is to work in the finacial divisi...

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如果你是说要加入这间公司成为员工，用involve不对了
你用join in 就和用involve 一样的`不对
finance - financial 才能形容field/sector
high platform - 英语没这说法， - 你要表达什么？高平台？高台？
my present goal is to work in the finacial division（arm） of an international company
which could provide me with 。。。 （语法没问题，用词就不能明确表达）

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right!

汗一个，你的写法也太.....我帮你改一下吧：
My current goal is to join an international company in the finance field, which could provide me with a broad view and opportunities for development.
如果人力资源的小蜜敢说这句英语不好，你就说是哈佛教授帮你改的:-)

纠正：join the company 进公司 ，不用加in .
My current goal is to join an international company in the finance field, which could provide me with a broad view 、opportunities for development and a splendid future.