Beauty is more than skin deepWe hear lots of people complain about parts of their body,they keep abusing them,spending thousands of dollars doing plastic surgeries.Does that make them more beautiful?Maybe it does but beauty is more than skin deep.We

Beauty is more than skin deepWe hear lots of people complain about parts of their body,they keep abusing them,spending thousands of dollars doing plastic surgeries.Does that make them more beautiful?Maybe it does but beauty is more than skin deep.We
Beauty is more than skin deep
We hear lots of people complain about parts of their body,they keep abusing them,spending thousands of dollars doing plastic surgeries.Does that make them more beautiful?Maybe it does but beauty is more than skin deep.We are gifted with those sensory organs to communicate.The ability to communicate effectively matters more than a beautiful face.
Remember,personal charm is more than the mere possession of a beautiful face.If you want to be more attractive,you need to be armed with effective communication skills.So think about it.What is the best way to put your message across?
On the one hand,we need to be aware and attentive to the wide application and manifestation of non-verbal communication in our lives; on the other hand,there is a note of caution that we need to bear in mind.We shouldn’t be too sensitive about the signals.When people rub their nose or droop their head during the middle of the conversation,the simplest explanations are that they just cannot help it.You cannot associate them with distrust all the time.Also,the meaning of gestures or signs may also vary from culture to culture.In southern China,people tap their finger on the table to show their appreciation to the host,westerners may nevertheless took it for contempt or disrespect due to lack of knowledge.
你们觉得这篇英语短文怎么样?写 的好不好我准备拿这篇去参加演讲比赛给一点建议~

Beauty is more than skin deepWe hear lots of people complain about parts of their body,they keep abusing them,spending thousands of dollars doing plastic surgeries.Does that make them more beautiful?Maybe it does but beauty is more than skin deep.We
英语演讲稿的句子在没有特殊要求的情况下,应该尽量简洁,能表达清楚自己的观点就可以了.有些句子太长了,听起来不太容易跟上.
另外,如果是说理性演讲的话,最好避免用第一人称描述,“I think……”这种句子最好说成“It's well-known that……”

关键你是什么水平的？高中？大学？
高中的话就还可以
有些语法错误记得改一下
We hear lots of people complain about parts of their body改为复数, 一个句子不能有2个主语的除非是分句 这里另起一句they keep abusing them, spending thousands of dollars doing pla...

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关键你是什么水平的？高中？大学？
高中的话就还可以
有些语法错误记得改一下
We hear lots of people complain about parts of their body改为复数, 一个句子不能有2个主语的除非是分句 这里另起一句they keep abusing them, spending thousands of dollars doing plastic surgeries. Does that改为复数 Would thouse surgeries make them more beautiful? Maybe it does but beauty is more than skin deep这个词组什么意思？皮肤深的？？？改成appearance. We are gifted（天生的要用endowed这个词 gifed是有才华的 天赋才华的意思） with those sensory organs （感觉器官怎么交流？）to communicate. The ability to communicate effectively matters more than a beautiful face.（这句太chiglish了 Actually, the communication ability occupy a much higher status than a beautiful outlook in the social world）
(We should always)Remember(that), personal charm is more than the mere possession of a beautiful face. If you want to be more attractive, you need to be armed(改为fulfilled) with effective communication skills. So think about it. What is the best way to put your message across?（这句想表达什么？什么叫put your message across? the best way to express yourself or get people understand you）
On the one hand, we need to be aware(d) (of)and attentive to (这两个词一个意思留一个即可)the wide application and manifestation （这个词用的不对 删）of non-verbal communication in our lives; on the other hand, there is a note of caution that we need to bear(keep) in mind. We shouldn’t be too sensitive about the (body) signals(languages or gestures). When people rub their nose(s) or droop their head(s) during the middle of the conversation, the simplest explanations are that they just cannot help (doing)it(them). You cannot associate them with distrust all the time. Also, the meaning of gestures or signs may also vary from culture to culture（这个from..to..一般只用于时间或者地点 改成in different cultures）.(For example) In southern China, people tap their finger on the table to show their appreciation to the host, (however)westerners may nevertheless(删 ) took(use) it for contempt or disrespect due to lack of knowledge.
这段离题了吧？外表不是社交的关键因素 为何扯到无需注意肢体语言？
建议你多看看老美写的文章 仿下他们的文章结构 用词注意准确 查字典的时候要看例句 而不是仅仅看中文解释

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我不知道你是什么水平，也不知道要参加什么样的演讲赛，我浏览了一下你的这段文章，觉得不太好，措辞，造句，都不太好。反正我是觉得差了点。一些地方太过重复，还有就是有的地方用词也不正确，对不起，恕我直言了。

演讲尽量用的句子不要太长，你这个写的真的不错，稍微注意一下断句就更好了。