麻烦帮忙修改一下我的日记有没有什么语法错误以及不地道的表达,Actually I really don't know why I like dog that much.I believe that dog must be the most lovely animal in the world.:)These days,I got a new job,actually speakin

麻烦帮忙修改一下我的日记有没有什么语法错误以及不地道的表达,Actually I really don't know why I like dog that much.I believe that dog must be the most lovely animal in the world.:)These days,I got a new job,actually speakin
麻烦帮忙修改一下我的日记有没有什么语法错误以及不地道的表达,
Actually I really don't know why I like dog that much.I believe that dog must be the most lovely animal in the world.:)
These days,I got a new job,actually speaking,it's not a job,just be an activity,this job is compulsory but full of fun.Can you guess what is it?Yep,just feeding that little yellow dog under my apartment.
Evertime when I go to dining hall I will take out some rice,vegetables,meats,beef,steaks,fishes or chickens from my dinner and put them into a bag or a dinner bucket.Then,I give all this delicious food to that doggy.However,that little young thing seems very scared of me every time,he want that food but not brave enough to come and eat it.Then I say to him (may be it's I say to myself)"oh come on boy,I am not gonna hurt you..." surly,it's not work,that doggy can not understand my language yet.Well,OK.
This afternoon I did the same thing,but it was quite interesting that when I was watching the doggy eating,another dog came around and that is a brave dog,he came and eat that food together with that little yellow dog and allowed me to touch him!So cool .

麻烦帮忙修改一下我的日记有没有什么语法错误以及不地道的表达,Actually I really don't know why I like dog that much.I believe that dog must be the most lovely animal in the world.:)These days,I got a new job,actually speakin
Actually I really don't know why I like that dog so much.I believe that the dog must be the most lovely animal in the world.:)
These days,I got a new job,actually speaking,it's not a job,just an activity.This job is not compulsory but it's full of fun.Can you guess what it is?Yes,just feeding that little yellow dog under my apartment.
Evertime I go to dining hall I will take some rice,vegetables,meats,beef,steaks,fishes or chickens from my dinner and put them into a bag or a dinner bucket.Then,I give all this delicious food to that doggy.However,that little young thing seems very afraid of me each time,he want that food but he is not brave enough to come and eat it.Then I say to him (maybe it's what I say to myself)"oh come on boy,I am not gonna hurt you..." surly,it doesn't work,because that doggy can not understand my language.Well,that's OK.
This afternoon I did the same thing,but it was quite interesting that when I was watching the doggy eating,another dog came around and that was a brave dog.He came and ate that food together with that little yellow dog and allowed me to touch him!So cool .
改的仅是语法,坦白的说不地道的表达就多了,当然日记也不做多少要求的,看明白就行

These days, I got a new job,（这里要用句号） actually speaking,it's not a job, just be（这个be不要） an activity, ,（这里要用句号）this job is compulsory but full of fun. Can you guess what is it?（是what it is

Actually I really don't know the reason that I like dogs so much. I think the dog must be the most lovely animal in the world. :)
Recently, I've got a new job, to tell the truth,it's not a job...

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Actually I really don't know the reason that I like dogs so much. I think the dog must be the most lovely animal in the world. :)
Recently, I've got a new job, to tell the truth,it's not a job but an activity indeed, this job is compulsory but full of fun. Can you guess what is it? Yep, just feeding a little yellow dog under my apartment.
When I go to the dining hall everytime， I will select some rice, vegetables, meat, beef, fishes or chicken from my dinner to a bag or a dinner bucket. Then, I will give all the delicious food to that smart doggy. However, that little young one seems very scared of me , he wants to eat the food but he is not brave enough to come and eat it. So I speak to him (may be what I say is just to myself)" Oh, come on boy, I won't hurt you..." of course, it is not useful, because the doggy can not understand my language at all. Well, OK.
This afternoon I did the same thing, but this time I found a quite interesting thing. When I was watching the doggy eating, at that time,another dog came around and began to eat that food together with the little yellow dog.How brave a dog !Then what made me excited was that he allowed me to touch him!! So cool !
OK!语法问题都解决了，你写的日记比较罗唆，所以，不太容易改，呵呵。
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