看看有没有语法错误,和用词不当的地方,Hello!Everybody!I study in No.1 Middle School.My name is Yangzi.How did you spend your last weekend?Fun,huh?Well,on Saturday morning,I went to my grandma’s home .She was very kind to me,and she c

看看有没有语法错误,和用词不当的地方,Hello!Everybody!I study in No.1 Middle School.My name is Yangzi.How did you spend your last weekend?Fun,huh?Well,on Saturday morning,I went to my grandma’s home .She was very kind to me,and she c
看看有没有语法错误,和用词不当的地方,
Hello!Everybody!I study in No.1 Middle School.My name is Yangzi.
How did you spend your last weekend?Fun,huh?Well,on Saturday morning,I went to my grandma’s home .She was very kind to me,and she cooked a nice meal for me.In the afternoon,I had a piano class,it was very interesting.And in the evening,I went to a movie with my parents.But on Sunday,I started to do my homework.I had too much homework to do.And I had to study for the coming test.After studying all day,I felt very tired.
So,the weekend was tired but interesting.
Thank you.

看看有没有语法错误,和用词不当的地方,Hello!Everybody!I study in No.1 Middle School.My name is Yangzi.How did you spend your last weekend?Fun,huh?Well,on Saturday morning,I went to my grandma’s home .She was very kind to me,and she c
有个小问题,就是英语和汉语不同,很多地方不要逗号,不过你是演讲,就不碍事,以后写作文是要注意.
稍微调整了一下语序,你的时间状语都是一个模式,会显得重复.都是简单句,没有什么语法错误,就是最后"the weekend was tired but interesting"的tired有问题,应该用"令人感到劳累的"tiring
Hello! Everybody!. I'm Yangzi .I come from No.1 Middle School.
How did you spend your last weekend? Is it fun?Well, on Saturday morning,I went to my grandma’s home .She was very kind to me and she cooked a nice meal for me. , I had a piano class in the afternoon, it was very interesting. Then my parents and I went to a movie in the evening. On Sunday, I started to do my homework. I had too much homework to do. And I had to study for the coming test. After studying all day, I felt very tired.
So, the weekend was tiring but interesting.
Thank you.

1.in the afternoon 可以该成 that afternoone
2,tired 只能修饰人的心情而不能说 the weekend was tired.可以改成 tiresome,令人劳累的

提一点建议，以后不管是写文章或是演讲稿，记得多用连接词，从句以及一些固定句型，这样不但会增加文章的连贯性也能使你的文章增色不少。下面的修改供你参考。
hello everyone my name is Yangzi, from No.1 middle school. How did you spend your last weekend? fun, huh? well, as for me...

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提一点建议，以后不管是写文章或是演讲稿，记得多用连接词，从句以及一些固定句型，这样不但会增加文章的连贯性也能使你的文章增色不少。下面的修改供你参考。
hello everyone my name is Yangzi, from No.1 middle school. How did you spend your last weekend? fun, huh? well, as for me, i went to my grandma's home on saturday morning. She treated me well and even cooked a nice meal for me. In the afternoon, i had a piano class, which was very interesting. In the evening, i watched a movie with my parents. While on sunday, i started to do my homework since i had too much homeword to do, plus i had to prepare for my coming test. I felt very tired after that.
Anyway, i had a tiring but interesting weekend, thanks for your attention.（用于演讲）

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