帮忙检查以下这段英文是不是语法正确Aloha my name is EmmaI hope one day I can play with alienIf you walk on street and then you see the alienPiz don’t be afraid and don’t touch himIf you see UFO also don’t be afraid You first one

帮忙检查以下这段英文是不是语法正确Aloha my name is EmmaI hope one day I can play with alienIf you walk on street and then you see the alienPiz don’t be afraid and don’t touch himIf you see UFO also don’t be afraid You first one
帮忙检查以下这段英文是不是语法正确
Aloha my name is Emma
I hope one day I can play with alien
If you walk on street and then you see the alien
Piz don’t be afraid and don’t touch him
If you see UFO also don’t be afraid
You first one need to do is
“CALL ME”
I like the 奇怪的事物
If you also like
You can add me to your friend
At last
Piz remember me
My name is Emma alien
Haaaaaa~~~~
(如题,还有帮忙把那个中文的翻译为英文,或者有什么要改的地方请告诉我,谢谢)

帮忙检查以下这段英文是不是语法正确Aloha my name is EmmaI hope one day I can play with alienIf you walk on street and then you see the alienPiz don’t be afraid and don’t touch himIf you see UFO also don’t be afraid You first one
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有不少错哦～我英语算是很厉害了～因此下面的你可以直接用～
我修改主要是根据两点：
1.语法错误
2.你要表达的意思
下面你自己看看吧,反正肯定要比其它好了
Aloha my name is Emma.
I hope one day I can play with an alien.
If you walk on the street and see an alien,please don’t be afraid and don’t touch him.
If you see an UFO,please don't be afraid,either.
The first thing you need to do is "TO CALL ME".
I like the strange things,you can add my name to your friend list if you also like them.
At last,please remember me,and my name is Emma alien.
Haaaaaa~
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❀：hi,
Aloha, my name is Emma
I hope that one day I could play with alien
If you walk on the street and then you see the alien
Please don’t be afraid and don’t touch him
If y...

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❀：hi,
Aloha, my name is Emma
I hope that one day I could play with alien
If you walk on the street and then you see the alien
Please don’t be afraid and don’t touch him
If you see UFO and also don’t be afraid
The first thing you need to do is to
“CALL ME”
I like the strange things
If you are the same like me
You can add me is your friend
At last
Please remember me
My name is Emma alien
Haaaaaa~~~~
当中的piz 是否为please?
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第6行那个one可以去掉
奇怪的事物 strange things
Piz是please么？