希望有高人帮我指点一下这篇英语短文how many people here still use their hands to write letters until now?what changed our way of communication?today,i'd like to talk to you about the change in way of communication with the evolution o

希望有高人帮我指点一下这篇英语短文how many people here still use their hands to write letters until now?what changed our way of communication?today,i'd like to talk to you about the change in way of communication with the evolution o
希望有高人帮我指点一下这篇英语短文
how many people here still use their hands to write letters until now?what changed our way of communication?today,i'd like to talk to you about the change in way of communication with the evolution of technology in human life.
over the past several thousands years,the letter has been still a most universal way between the people exchanges,we can connect with people,include our friends,family member and relative,through the letter.letter can make people who apart thousands of miles exchange information no matter what is the messager,pigeon or postman.but this way which have existed a few thousand years happened to accept a severe challenge in the past two decades.more people began to choose telephone as a way of communcation with the emergence and popularization of the telephone.however,after a little the cell phone have gradually replaced the fixed telephone and become another popular way of communication among people.at the same time,more and more people can surf the internet with the invention and popularization of computer,so people can connect with others in internet web,even with the strange person.the traditional way of communication was thoroughly changed.
from the change of communication in our life,we can see the people's life styles surely are changing with the evolution of technology.but this change is good or bad which depends on how you think.
that's all about my presentation.
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这是一篇报告，帮我改一下错误的地方，改的好可以给加分

希望有高人帮我指点一下这篇英语短文how many people here still use their hands to write letters until now?what changed our way of communication?today,i'd like to talk to you about the change in way of communication with the evolution o
still use their hands to write letters - still write letters by hand
until now - even now
changed - has changed
way - ways
change in way - changes in ways
life - lives
the letter has been still a most universal way between the people exchanges - correspondence has always been the most univcersal way of communication between people
connect with people - keep in contact/touch with other people
include - including
family member - family members
relative - relatives
through the letter - through correspondence
letter can make people who apart thousands of miles exchange information no matter what is the messager,pigeon or postman - With the help of correspondence,people thousands of miles apart could exchnage information via messengers,pigeons or postal workers.
but this way which have existed a few thousand years happened to accept a severe challenge in the past two decades - But in the past two decades,this traditional way of communication has gone through some severe changes.
more people began to choose telephone as a way of communcation with the emergence and popularization of the telephone.however,after a little the cell phone have gradually replaced the fixed telephone and become another popular way of communication among people.- With the popularization of the telephone,more and more began to prefer the telephone as a way of communication,especially in the cases of emergencies.And then slowly but surely,cell phones started replacing land phones as the popular way of communication.
computer - the computer
in internet - on web sites
even with the strange person - even with strangers
was thoroughly changed - has been changed completely
change - changes
communication - ways of communication
can - could
but this change is good or bad which depends on how you think.- But whether these changes are for better or for worse still depends on one's point of view.
that's all about my presentation.英文中没有这样结尾的,直接说Thank you very much.就可以了

现在还有几个人用手写书信？是什么改变了我们交流的方式？今天，我想跟大家谈谈人类生活交流方式的发展改变。
在过去的几千年中，书信一直都是人们交流的普遍方式。我们能通过书信联系你我，包括我们的朋友，家人和亲戚，书信能让相隔千里的人互传信息，不管邮递员是人还是鸽子。但是这样的方式已经存在了上千年，却不得不在过去的20年里接受一种服务挑战。由于电话的普及，越来越多的人开始选择电话作为紧急时的通讯工...

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现在还有几个人用手写书信？是什么改变了我们交流的方式？今天，我想跟大家谈谈人类生活交流方式的发展改变。
在过去的几千年中，书信一直都是人们交流的普遍方式。我们能通过书信联系你我，包括我们的朋友，家人和亲戚，书信能让相隔千里的人互传信息，不管邮递员是人还是鸽子。但是这样的方式已经存在了上千年，却不得不在过去的20年里接受一种服务挑战。由于电话的普及，越来越多的人开始选择电话作为紧急时的通讯工具，然而，小小的手机渐渐地取代了固定电话地位，在人群中成为另一种流行的交流方式。同时，由于计算机的发明和普及，越来越多的人能上网了，因此我们可以通过互联网互相交流，甚至与陌生人交流。传统的交流方式彻底的改变了。
从我们交流方式的改变可以看出，人们的生活风格的确随着科技的发展而改变着，但是这个改变的好坏就看自己的看法了。
这就是我今天的演讲。

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第一句until多余，第三句change→changes，第二段第一句thousands→thousand,the letter中the去掉，the people→people's，family member and relative改为复数，letter can make people who→letter can make people whom，more people began to ch...

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第一句until多余，第三句change→changes，第二段第一句thousands→thousand,the letter中the去掉，the people→people's，family member and relative改为复数，letter can make people who→letter can make people whom，more people began to choose telephone as a way →more people began to choose telephone as the way , in internet web→throught internet web,but this change →but whether this change ,all about my presentation→all my presentation

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how many people here still use your hands to write letters?what has changed our way of communications? today,i'd like to talk about the changing way of communications with the evolution of technology ...

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how many people here still use your hands to write letters?what has changed our way of communications? today,i'd like to talk about the changing way of communications with the evolution of technology in human life.
over the past several thousands of years,the letter has been still the most universal way of communications between people.we can contact with people,include our friends,family members and relatives, through the letter. letter can make people who are apart from thousands of miles exchange information by pigeons or postmen. but this way which has existed for thousands of years happened to accept a severe challenges in the past two decades. more people began to regard telephone as a way of communcation with the emergence and popularization of the telephone. however,the cell phone gradually replaced the fixed telephone and became another popular way of communication among people. At the same time, more and more people can surf the internet with the invention and popularization of computer,so people can contact with others on internet,even with the strange person.the traditional way of communication has thoroughly changed.
With the change of communication in our life, people's life styles surely are changing with the evolution of technology.but whether this change is good or not,it is up to your thought.
that's all about my presentation.
大致修改了一下，你可以对照看看。

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