哪位英语好的,帮忙看一下这篇文章的语法和拼写错误.When people think of summer,they think "hot." Well,it really is.The strong sunshine and high temperatures make you sweat all day.On such hot days,a glass of ice water may not quit

哪位英语好的,帮忙看一下这篇文章的语法和拼写错误.When people think of summer,they think "hot." Well,it really is.The strong sunshine and high temperatures make you sweat all day.On such hot days,a glass of ice water may not quit
哪位英语好的,帮忙看一下这篇文章的语法和拼写错误.
When people think of summer,they think "hot." Well,it really is.The strong sunshine and high temperatures make you sweat all day.On such hot days,a glass of ice water may not quite satisfy your needs,so why not try some ice cream?And today my topic is “ice cream”.
To this day,the history of ice cream remains a mystery.However,many say that the first ice cream is credited to Emperor Nero of Rome.It was a mixture of snow,nectar,fruit pulp,and honey.Others proclaim that Marco Polo,a 13th century adventurer,brought ice cream to Europe from the Far East.
Compared with years before,new types of ice cream turn up every summer.Ice cream is no longer just a mix consisting of milk products,sugar,corn syrup,and flavoring.It may also contain egg products,stabilizers,emulsifiers,and other ingredients derived from non-milk substances.So today ice cream has a lot of taste,such as :chocolate ice cream,strawberry ice cream ,milk ice cream and so on.However,the favorite flavor may be the classic vanilla.Then comes chocolate,strawberry,Neapolitan,and chocolate chip.
with more and more ice cream shops all around,there are many places offering a cool and quiet place to enjoy your ice cream.Let's take a look.
Haagen Dazs
This is one of the most famous ice cream brands and has become
quite popular in China's big cities like Beijing and Shanghai.
The nice decorations and quiet environment make up for such
high prices.
Baskin-Robbins
This ice cream chain came to China in 1993.The Chinese name for
Baskin-Robbins is "31 ice creams," boasting the fact that they
can offer you a different flavor every day of the month.Each
Baskin-Robbins has the same simple design,but this certainly
does not affect the taste.
TCBY
TCBY stands for "The Country's Best Yogurt," and is an
American brand selling soft and frozen yogurt and ice cream.
Mondo Gelato and TIAMO Offers Italian ice cream.
Valentino
Valentino is a chocolate shop,but to people that visit often,
the ice cream is most attractive.Although the variety of ice
cream is limited,the flavor is outstanding.
有什么修改建议顺带一起写一下,

哪位英语好的,帮忙看一下这篇文章的语法和拼写错误.When people think of summer,they think "hot." Well,it really is.The strong sunshine and high temperatures make you sweat all day.On such hot days,a glass of ice water may not quit
第一段：
第一句：最好改为：What do people think of summer?They may say,it's too hot,and it's a true.
第二句：可改用复句（可丰富文章语言）The sunshine is so strong and the temperature is so high that make everybody sweat all day.
第三句：On such a hot day(更合理）……
第二段：第一个词可用Nowadays(现今）代替.
However,many （加：people)say that the first ice cream is(应为was) credited to Emperor Nero of Rome.
Compared with years before,new types of ice cream turn up every summer.[这句没读明白,你可以把它用中文表示,我再试试帮你翻成英文]
Ice cream is no longer（no longer 是副词,不能跟在be动词后使用,可考虑放在句末.译为：不再） just a mix consisting of …
Then comes chocolate,strawberry,Neapolitan,and chocolate chip.
[此句无主语,应在Then后面加上主语]
第三段：with more and more ice cream shops all around,there are many places offering a cool and quiet place to enjoy your ice cream.此句可改为：With more and more ice cream shops building around us,there are also many places to offer us to enjoy our ice cream.
剩下的……牵扯一些专业知识,我就不太懂了.不过第二段中的时态用得不太好,比较混乱,建议你将“过去时”和“一般现在时”分成两段来写,结构会更清晰.整体来讲,还算可以吧,但希望以后注意文章细节部分,不要忽略细节哦!
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首先说第一段。第二句 The strong sunshine and high temperatures make you sweat all day.其中主语为两个，所以在high temperature 前面也应该加the，而且temperature用单数。后面应该是satisfy your need。
第二段中，So today ice cream has a lot of t...

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首先说第一段。第二句 The strong sunshine and high temperatures make you sweat all day.其中主语为两个，所以在high temperature 前面也应该加the，而且temperature用单数。后面应该是satisfy your need。
第二段中，So today ice cream has a lot of taste, such as :chocolate ice cream, strawberry ice cream ,milk ice cream and so on. 这句话是不是有点问题啊，前面说有多种口味，后面又说种类，感觉有点不搭配。
先看这些吧，不过感觉楼主写的还是不错，也学到了一些知识，呵呵
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