面试自我介绍英语.请帮我看看有没有语法错误,并帮我改正.或者有没有更好的.Hello,teachers!I'mglad to meet you.My name isYANGJIMENG and my English name is Mary.I'm 12 yearsold.I am studying in WuYi Primary school.I have man

面试自我介绍英语.请帮我看看有没有语法错误,并帮我改正.或者有没有更好的.Hello,teachers!I'mglad to meet you.My name isYANGJIMENG and my English name is Mary.I'm 12 yearsold.I am studying in WuYi Primary school.I have man
面试自我介绍英语.请帮我看看有没有语法错误,并帮我改正.或者有没有更好的.
Hello,teachers!I'm
glad to meet you.My name isYANGJIMENG and my English name is Mary.I'm 12 years
old.I am studying in WuYi Primary school.I have many hobbies,such as
swimming、drawing、reading books and so on.Among them read books
Is my favorite hobby.I often reading books at home.By the way ,I want to be a winter in the future
.I hope I can go to BeiDaziyuan Middle School and become a student there.That's
all.Thanks a lot.

面试自我介绍英语.请帮我看看有没有语法错误,并帮我改正.或者有没有更好的.Hello,teachers!I'mglad to meet you.My name isYANGJIMENG and my English name is Mary.I'm 12 yearsold.I am studying in WuYi Primary school.I have man
hello 用在这儿有些不妥,应根据时间选择Good morning/afternoon/evening.I am Jimeng(名) YANG (姓) and my English name is Mary.I am very happy to meet you all.I'm 12 and currently attending Wuyi Primary School.I like to read books during my spare time.I think reading books is my most favorite hobby.I have other hobbies as well,such as swimming and drawing.I have one dream,that is,I want to become a writer in the future.To make this dream become true,I hope to become a student at BD Middle School.That's all.Thank you.
我做了一些修改,

把reading book 改为reading。among them, reading is my favorate hobby.l often read books at home.注意此处时态。writer 而不是winter。l hope l could go to ...大概就可以了。希望帮助到你

以下是正确答案：Among them reading books is my favorite. I often read books at home. By the way ,I want to be a writer in the future
. I hope I can go to BeiDaziyuan Middle School and become a student of there. That's
all. Thanks a lot.

hi,everybody.i'm so glad to meet you all.now please let me give you a brief introduction of myself. my name's Yang Jimeng,but you can call me Mary,which is my english name.i'm 12 years old now and i'm...

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hi,everybody.i'm so glad to meet you all.now please let me give you a brief introduction of myself. my name's Yang Jimeng,but you can call me Mary,which is my english name.i'm 12 years old now and i'm studying in Wuyi Primary School.i have a bunch of hobbies,such as swimming,drawing and reading,among which i like reading best.i often read books at home.by the way,i hope i'll be part of beidaziyuan middle school .after that,i want to be a writer in the future.that's all. thanks for listening.

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I often reading books at home的reading应改成read，因为often后面用一般现在时。

Hello , ladies and gentlemen,
......I have many hobbies, such as
swimming、drawing、reading books and so on. Among which reading books
Is my favorite hobby. (I often reading books at home.)...

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Hello , ladies and gentlemen,
......I have many hobbies, such as
swimming、drawing、reading books and so on. Among which reading books
Is my favorite hobby. (I often reading books at home.)去掉这句重复......I want to be a winter /winner
说一下你所了解的BeiDaziyuan Middle School ，你的目标是什么，这样你的作文会丰满些
欢迎追问，望采纳

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