帮我看看我的文章吧有什么毛病请指出 An optional course on English Time goes by,I have studied this optional course for a term.I like English ,That’s why I choose English for my optional course.When I first came into this classroom,I

帮我看看我的文章吧有什么毛病请指出 An optional course on English Time goes by,I have studied this optional course for a term.I like English ,That’s why I choose English for my optional course.When I first came into this classroom,I
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An optional course on English
Time goes by,I have studied this optional course for a term.I like English ,That’s why I choose English for my optional course.When I first came into this classroom,I felt very excited.I thought everyone here loved English.And I first saw my optional course teacher.It is a man.He usually gives us a test paper to fill in.And then he will ask some of us to say what he or she chose ,and why.Then correct it.I got a lot of knowledge .And I felt very interesting.
On Friday afternoon,my mood is always very good.I can do what I love to do ,you know ,this feeling is excellent.
Then I am going to say something on this course.How much English knowledge did my teacher teach us I think first ,the vacabulary,He took one or two lessons on it.Then ,grammar,it’s important.And last,reading and writing,teacher taught us a lot of English words ,English manners and so on .Don’t worry,I ‘ve forgot one thing.Teacher also gave us a test.Oh,I haven’t got a good mark.I was very sad.
I’m satisfied with this optional course.Though it’s an optional course,but no one has done anything wasn’t link with the class.It gave me a very good time,a peace time,a time I will never forget.
I hope to take part in it next time!
有英语课，但选修课里也有英语课，我喜欢英语，所以选英语

帮我看看我的文章吧有什么毛病请指出 An optional course on English Time goes by,I have studied this optional course for a term.I like English ,That’s why I choose English for my optional course.When I first came into this classroom,I
I like English ,that’s why I chose it as my optional course.
And I first saw my optional course teacher,who is a man.
Then he corrects it.
And I felt it's very interesting.
Then I am going to say something about this course.
At last,reading and writing.My teacher taught us a lot of English words ,English manners and so on .
Don’t worry,I ‘ve forgot one thing.(这句话放在这里感觉怪怪的)
Oh,I hadn’t got a good mark.I was very sad.
Though it’s an optional course,no one has done anything that has nothing to do with the class.(这句不太好改,将就了哈)
It gave me a very good time,a peaceful time,a time I will never forget.
I wish to take it the next time!（是course直接用take就行了）

基本意思表达出来了，但语感不行。
比如说第一句 time goes by 就不如用time fly来表达“时间过的真快!”
and 和then 简单化的重复太多，就象你说中文的时候，不停的说“然后。。。然后”，“还有。。。还有。。。”
多看点原版的东西会好很多。
英语是选修课？...

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基本意思表达出来了，但语感不行。
比如说第一句 time goes by 就不如用time fly来表达“时间过的真快!”
and 和then 简单化的重复太多，就象你说中文的时候，不停的说“然后。。。然后”，“还有。。。还有。。。”
多看点原版的东西会好很多。
英语是选修课？

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