帮我看看这篇简介有没有错误或者改进的地方Self IntroductionGood morning teachers.It is really a great honor to have this opportunity for this interview.First let me introduce myself.My name is Fang Lurongzi,and my English name is Am

帮我看看这篇简介有没有错误或者改进的地方Self IntroductionGood morning teachers.It is really a great honor to have this opportunity for this interview.First let me introduce myself.My name is Fang Lurongzi,and my English name is Am
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Good morning teachers.It is really a great honor to have this opportunity for this interview.First let me introduce myself.My name is Fang Lurongzi,and my English name is Amy.I graduated from the No.4 Middle School this summer.
I am very optimistic,outgoing and active.And I think my best characteristic is that I’m very indenpent.Because my parents decided to start their own business when I was in grade three,they sent me to a host family.And I had to take care of myself when I was very young.But I adapted to the new life very quickly.Then I became more and more indenpent.So I think I can look after myself well if I go to study in your school.
In my spare time,I have broad interests like many other teenagers.I like reading books,listening to music,playing the erhu and I love computer programming,too.My favorite subjects are math and English.Because I think that studying math can improve my ways of thinking and English can make me go farther to have a broader view.
I always believe that one will easily lag behind unless he keeps on learning .Of course,if I am given a chance to study in your school,I will try my best to study hard and be a pride in your school

帮我看看这篇简介有没有错误或者改进的地方Self IntroductionGood morning teachers.It is really a great honor to have this opportunity for this interview.First let me introduce myself.My name is Fang Lurongzi,and my English name is Am
for this interview不用要就可以
independent拼错了 拼成indenpent了
when I was very young用的不好 你现在也是young啊 说when I was 8/9 （你三年级多大就多大了）会好一点
if I go to study in your school感觉有点生硬 可以稍微生动一些 说if I have the chance to be a part of your school或者to be a student in your school或者to be your students 都可以 然后后面那个study in your school就不用改了 前后相同的意思表达方法不重复会比较显水平
reading就可以了 book不需要
farther改成further比较好 farther只有具体的远 further还可以指抽象的远
最后半句说I will keep studying hard或者I will always study hard比较好 try my best to study hard给人感觉你还是有可能会不努力学习的= =
最后的最后说下hopefully I would become your pride in 3 years感觉可能相对谦逊一点

Good morning. It's really a great honor to have this opportunity for the interview. I'd like to introduce myself. My name is Fang Lurongzi, and my English name is Amy. I graduated from the No.4 Middle...

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Good morning. It's really a great honor to have this opportunity for the interview. I'd like to introduce myself. My name is Fang Lurongzi, and my English name is Amy. I graduated from the No.4 Middle School this summer.
I am very optimistic, outgoing and energetic. And I think my best characteristic is that I’m very indenpent.Because my parents decided to start their own business when I was in grade three, they sent me to a host family. And I had to take care of myself when I was very young. But I adapted to the new life very quickly. Then I became more and more indenpent.So I think I can look after myself well if I go to study in your school.（太罗嗦了）
During my spare time，I like reading books, listening to music, playing the erhu and I love computer programming, too. My favorite subjects are math and English. Because I think that studying math can improve my ways of thinking and English can make me go farther to have a broader view.
I always believe that one will easily lag behind unless he keeps on learning .Of course, if I am given a chance to study in your school, I will try my best to study hard and be a pride in your school.
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