我的英文求职信,麻烦帮我挑错并提修改意见I learned that your company wanted to hire a financial analyst,so I am writing to you bacause I am very interested in the position and competent to meet your requirements.1.I am experienced in

我的英文求职信,麻烦帮我挑错并提修改意见I learned that your company wanted to hire a financial analyst,so I am writing to you bacause I am very interested in the position and competent to meet your requirements.1.I am experienced in
我的英文求职信,麻烦帮我挑错并提修改意见
I learned that your company wanted to hire a financial analyst,so I am writing to you bacause I am very interested in the position and competent to meet your requirements.
1.I am experienced in financial investment.I have been working in a consulting firm providing investment advisory to financial institutions for more than 2 years.As a consultant,I have been actively involved in various consulting projects including market scan for investment opportunities,due diligence and study on listed companies.
2.I have strong education background which shows my outstanding learning ability.I holds a master's degree in Management Science & Engineering and a bachelor's degree in Management and Information Systems both from Tsinghua University in Beijing.
3.I have learned a lot of financial knowledge and passed CFA level 1 and level 2 exams in 2008 and 2009 respectively.
I would appreciate your time in reviewing my enclosed resume and if there is any additional information you require,please contact me.I would welcome an opportunity to meet with you for a personal interview.
With many thanks,

我的英文求职信,麻烦帮我挑错并提修改意见I learned that your company wanted to hire a financial analyst,so I am writing to you bacause I am very interested in the position and competent to meet your requirements.1.I am experienced in
楼主很强势,有少数修改意见仅供参考,探讨而已,不足为凭.
1.I learned that your company is going to employ a financial analyst,so I am writing to you because I am very interested in the position and competent to your requirements.
1,want用于无人称主语不是很好,hire不如employ更常用,competent是胜任就无需meet了,意思重复.
2.I have experience in financial investment.I have worked in a consulting firm providing financial institutions with investment advice for more than 2 years.As a consultant,I have been actively involved in various consulting projects such as market scan for investment opportunities,due diligence investigation and study on listed companies.
2,I am experienced我经历了金融投资,比较别扭,不如改为我有……的经验,如想表达经历（不是一次）,那可用复数.Provide……with……是典型的用法.用for more than 2 years就用现在完成时即可,同样表示现在还在这家咨询公司工作；如用完成进行时,那用since 200× 比较好.Due diligence加个investigation意思似乎更清楚一点.
3.I have a strong education background which shows my outstanding learning ability.I hold a master's degree in Management Science & Engineering and a bachelor's degree in Management and Information Systems both from Tsinghua University in Beijing.
3.背景加个不定冠词较好,I是第一人称,hold不应该用单数.
4.I have learned a lot of financial knowledge and passed CFA level 1 and level 2 exams in 2008 and 2009 respectively.
I would appreciate your time in reviewing my enclosed resume and if there is any additional information you require,please contact me.I would welcome an opportunity to meet with you for a personal interview.
With many thanks,

I learned that your company is currently hiring(你用过去时说明公司现在不要人了） a financial analyst。 I would like to apply for this position because i think i am qualified(达不达到要求不时你说了算的，说你能胜任我个人感觉好些，做人要低调，^-^).The b...

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I learned that your company is currently hiring(你用过去时说明公司现在不要人了） a financial analyst。 I would like to apply for this position because i think i am qualified(达不达到要求不时你说了算的，说你能胜任我个人感觉好些，做人要低调，^-^).The belowing are my background and achievements
1.I am familiar with financial investment business. I have worked in a professional consulting firm for more than 2 years when(where) i have engaged in a number of consulting projects like investment opportunity screening(due diligence and study on listed companies,这个我不太明白你想说什么，貌似不是项目）
2.I have a strong academic background (要点到为止哈）.I am holding a master's degree in Management Science & Engineering and a bachelor's degree in Management and Information Systems both of Tsinghua University in Beijing.
3.I have passed CFA level 1 and level 2 respectively in 2008 and 2009(I have learned a lot of financial knowledge这个我觉得多余）
your time on (reviewing) my resume will be much appreaciated and please contact me whenever you require additional information. If an interview is required, i am very glad to attend and discuss with you
with many thanks

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