谁帮我看看语句通不通顺My Chinese name is Liu Yu Kun,I am 13 years old.I don't have English name.My house includes the 4 people person,they are my father,mother,younger brother with me.I love them.I like to play with my younger brother toge

谁帮我看看语句通不通顺My Chinese name is Liu Yu Kun,I am 13 years old.I don't have English name.My house includes the 4 people person,they are my father,mother,younger brother with me.I love them.I like to play with my younger brother toge
谁帮我看看语句通不通顺
My Chinese name is Liu Yu Kun,I am 13 years old.I don't have English name.My house includes the 4 people person,they are my father,mother,younger brother with me.I love them.I like to play with my younger brother together,he is lovely.My ideal will be to become a painter,I like to paint.并把意思写在下面~（自己写的）

谁帮我看看语句通不通顺My Chinese name is Liu Yu Kun,I am 13 years old.I don't have English name.My house includes the 4 people person,they are my father,mother,younger brother with me.I love them.I like to play with my younger brother toge
English name前面应加个an；
My house includes the 4 people person这句不能用the,people和person重复；改为There are 4 persons in my family 比较好；
they are my father,mother,younger brother with me.with改成and;
idel是个形容词,应该用dream,My dream is to become a painter.I like paniting.
给你改写一下吧,
My Chinese name is Liu Yu Kun,and I don't have an English name.I am 13 years old.我的中文名叫刘玉坤,我没有英文名.今年13岁.
There are 4 persons in my family,my father,my mother,my younger brother and I.I love my family.I like playing with my younger brother,who is lovely.
我的家庭有四个成员,我的父亲、母亲、弟弟还有我.我爱我的家人.我喜欢和我弟弟一起玩耍,他很可爱.
I like painting,my dream is to become a painter（becoming a painter).
我喜欢绘画,我的梦想是成为一名画家.

我的中文名字叫刘宇坤，今年13岁，我没有英文名字。我家一共有4人，爸爸，妈妈，弟弟和我，我爱他们。我喜欢和弟弟一起玩耍，因为他很可爱。我的理想是成为一名画家，因为我喜欢画画。
写得不错

My house (home)has 4 people , they are my father, mother, younger brother with(and) me. I like to play with my younger brother together.
最好是"I like playing" My dream is to become a painter, I like painting.

My Chinese name is Liu Yu Kun, I am 13 years old. I don't have English names. There are 4 people in my family, they are my father, mother, younger brother and me. I love them. I like playing with my younger brother together, he is lovely. I want to be a painter, I like painting.