请英语高手帮我点评我的这篇英语四级作文,1：中国城乡之间的差距似乎有增大的趋势2：导致这种现象的原因3：怎样才能缩小城乡之间的差距Bridging the Gap between the Urban and Rural AreasWith the deve

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请英语高手帮我点评我的这篇英语四级作文,1：中国城乡之间的差距似乎有增大的趋势2：导致这种现象的原因3：怎样才能缩小城乡之间的差距BridgingtheGapbetweentheUrbanandRur

请英语高手帮我点评我的这篇英语四级作文,1：中国城乡之间的差距似乎有增大的趋势2：导致这种现象的原因3：怎样才能缩小城乡之间的差距Bridging the Gap between the Urban and Rural AreasWith the deve
请英语高手帮我点评我的这篇英语四级作文,
1：中国城乡之间的差距似乎有增大的趋势
2：导致这种现象的原因
3：怎样才能缩小城乡之间的差距
Bridging the Gap between the Urban and Rural Areas
With the development of economy,the gap betwwen the urban and rural areas seems increased.The urban areas developing better and better,the rural areas geting and geting worse and worse.
I think there are two reasons lead to this gap.For one thing,the cultural and educational work is not develop well,so many rural people have not a good educational level to help their hometown to develop.For another thing,many rural younger goes to the urban areas are develop well and there are not many talented staying in rural areas.
We should take some mesures to bridge the gap between the urban and rural areas.Firstly,the rural governments should devote major efforts to educational work.Secondly,the country governments should offer a large number of money to help those rural areas to develop.Lastly,the rural people should stay in their hometown to help their hometown to develop.

请英语高手帮我点评我的这篇英语四级作文,1：中国城乡之间的差距似乎有增大的趋势2：导致这种现象的原因3：怎样才能缩小城乡之间的差距Bridging the Gap between the Urban and Rural AreasWith the deve
值得肯定的是,没有错误的单词,但是病句很多,即句子结构错误严重.
1.With the development of economy,the gap betwwen the urban and rural areas seems increased(前面那个动名词根本就缺少句子成分)
2.The urban areas [are] developing better and better,the rural areas geting and geting worse and worse.the rural areas are geting worse and worse.
3.is not developing very well
4.so many rural people dont have a good
5.many rural youngers go to the urban areas and there are not many talented ones staying in rural areas.
还有一些句子冗余,还有一些地方需要桥接下,修改成这样会好很多:
1.better and better,on the controry,the rural areas ...
2.I think改为in my opinion
3.We should take 改为it should be taken ...,后面再添加一句,so what could we do on earth?
4.Lastly改为 the last one but not at least(最后但不是最重要的一个)
5.最后再添加一句:all in all ,with the efforts of all of people,the gap between the urban and rural areas will be smaller,and disappear finally.

第一段和第二段的第一句怪怪的

第一段中，seems后应该接to be increasing比较好，seem to do sth。第二句话中没有动词，是错误的。
第二段第一句话有两个动词，不对，lead应改为leading；第二句话is not developing well，be动词后应接ing形式。many rural younger，既然many了，就应用复数，而且动词也应相应变化，其后are develop we...

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第一段中，seems后应该接to be increasing比较好，seem to do sth。第二句话中没有动词，是错误的。
第二段第一句话有两个动词，不对，lead应改为leading；第二句话is not developing well，be动词后应接ing形式。many rural younger，既然many了，就应用复数，而且动词也应相应变化，其后are develop well，are应为where ， talented 应为 talentes，mesures拼写错误。总的来说，结构还可以，就是缺少点吸引人眼球的句型，而且重复的单词运用较多，应注意同意思的词用不同的单词表达，更显文章的多样化，还有注意单词拼写，不要粗心哦！

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1 The urban areas developing better and better,the rural areas geting and geting worse and worse.改为While the urban areas develop better and better,the rural areas get worse and worse.
2 I think t...

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1 The urban areas developing better and better,the rural areas geting and geting worse and worse.改为While the urban areas develop better and better,the rural areas get worse and worse.
2 I think there are two reasons lead to this gap中的lead改为leading，there be句型中的谓语动词要用非谓语形式。
3 cultural and educational work is not develop well,so many rural people have not a good educational level to help their hometown to develop中，is not改为does not，在so many 前面加and。
4 many rural younger goes to the urban areas are develop well and there are not many talented staying in rural areas中are develop改为developing，talented 后面加ones。
这些事语法上的错误，至于其他的就不多说了。希望对你有帮助~~~

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