求大神看看我的雅思作文 大约能得多少分数?哪里需要修改! The graph illustrates the number of people at a londen underground station between 6:00 and 22:00. We can see from the graph that the number of people was 100, which i
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求大神看看我的雅思作文 大约能得多少分数?哪里需要修改! The graph illustrates the number of people at a londen underground station between 6:00 and 22:00. We can see from the graph that the number of people was 100, which i
求大神看看我的雅思作文 大约能得多少分数?哪里需要修改!
The graph illustrates the number of people at a londen underground station between 6:00 and 22:00.
We can see from the graph that the number of people was 100, which is one of its lowest points. There was a dramatic growth in the number of people,especially at 8:00 when the number reached its the highest point at 400. From then, the number dropped sharply until 10:00. After that, there was a slight increase in the number of people from about 190 to 290 . The period from 12:00 to 14:00 remained relatively stable at about 300. there was a significant flucuation ,specially between 14:00 and 18:00, with a sharp decrease until 16:00, followed by a sharp increase after that date. The period from 18:00 to 22:00 experienced a dramatic decrease ,with a general rise between 20:00 and 21:00.
It can be seen from the graph that the number at 8:00 had the highest number ,which is 4 times as much as at 16:00 ,which reached its lowest point at 100.
求大神看看我的雅思作文 大约能得多少分数?哪里需要修改! The graph illustrates the number of people at a londen underground station between 6:00 and 22:00. We can see from the graph that the number of people was 100, which i
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句式变化的掌握是没多大问题的.
注意的是文章的连贯性和整体性.比如,第二段第一句,你再读的话感觉感觉和下文的连接如何呢?写完读一读就能发现这方面的问题
注意词的替换.比如number就重复了好几遍,amount,figure,quantity都能替代
最后一段,不要再将最高点和最低点的数值重复一遍,可以替换成地铁站何时最拥挤何时人较少之类
不是考官,仅供参考哦!加油!