求英语作文改错啊,帮我看看我的作文语法或者单词或者其他什么错的~Styles of good deedsThis world there are a lot of good deeds,some people think that spirit is a kind of good deed,some people think that action is a kind of g

求英语作文改错啊,帮我看看我的作文语法或者单词或者其他什么错的~Styles of good deedsThis world there are a lot of good deeds,some people think that spirit is a kind of good deed,some people think that action is a kind of g
求英语作文改错啊,帮我看看我的作文语法或者单词或者其他什么错的~
Styles of good deeds
This world there are a lot of good deeds,some people think that spirit is a kind of good deed,some people think that action is a kind of good deed.Today,i will talk about good deeds.In my opinion,i think good deeds have two styles like spirit and action.
To stare with,a good deed is a kind of spirit.First,smile is very important things,everyone can smile,a smile is a wonderful things.For example,if you want to talk about business,smile would make people to relax,smile will promote the negotiations.The smile really is the benevolence symbol,the joyful fountainhead.Smile can let you to succeed,so smile is a good deed about spirit.Second,smile can batter communicate with people smile is the world’s most amazing thing one.If you always smile,you can make a lot of new friends,because smile is a kind of very good spirit exchanges.In addition,love is anther spirit kind of good deed.First,the family has given you everything,you need to return home.Friends has given you a lot of happiness,you need to return them.For example,if your parents are old,you need to take care of them,and need to give them moral support,often accompany at their side.Give them love.Second,friends has given you a lots happiness and help,you need to return them.For example,if your friends have some problem,you need to help them and give them a hug.Give them moral support.I think it is good deeds about spirit.
Next,i will talk about the action style of good deeds.First of all,i think volunteer is a good thing.Volunteer can help a lot of people.For example,in this world,there are many people who are need of help.Volunteer often help these people,give them some foods or water.Second,volunteer can make people happy and relax.For example,volunteer often show some interesting programs,these programs would make people happy and relaxed.In addition,i think charitable organization is another good thing about action.First,the charitable organization can help poor people and give poor people new home.For example many poor people don't have the money to cure disease,the charitable organization always given this people money and help them find hospital.Second,the charitable organizations often give poor people new home.For example,in Africa,a lot of the poor people,charitable organization often give their help,help them find their own family,helping them to build their own home.
To sum up ,in this world,a lot of people always do some good deeds,i think it is good .i think good deeds have two styles,spirit and action .i hope the people will do good deeds ,often help who need help.

求英语作文改错啊,帮我看看我的作文语法或者单词或者其他什么错的~Styles of good deedsThis world there are a lot of good deeds,some people think that spirit is a kind of good deed,some people think that action is a kind of g
Styles of good deeds（好事的风格?最好改为type,类型,种类）
This world there are a lot of good deeds（改为There are a lot of good deeds in this world),some people think that spirit is a kind of good deed,some people think that action is a kind of good deed.Today,i will talk about good deeds.In my opinion,i think（I think 和in my opinion重复,选其一） good deeds have two styles like(like最好用杠代替） spirit and action.
To stare（start） with,a good deed is a kind of spirit.First,smile is very important things（去掉things）,everyone can smile,a smile is a wonderful things（单复数,去掉S,前面有a).For example,if you want to talk about business,smile would make people to relax(改为make people feel relaxed),smile will promote the negotiations.The smile really is(really放到is后面） the benevolence symbol,the joyful fountainhead.Smile can let you to succeed（let you to succeed有问题,Smile can lead you to success）,so smile is a good deed about spirit.Second,smile can batter（batter?benefit更好） communicate with people （此处加个and）smile is the world’s most amazing thing one（去掉one或者改为one of the world's most amazing thing）.If you always smile,you can make a lot of new friends,because smile is a kind of very good spirit exchanges(去掉S）.In addition,love is anther spirit kind of good deed.First,the family has given you everything,you need to return home（最好去掉home).Friends has改为have） given you a lot of happiness,you need to return them.For example,if your parents are old,you need to take care of them,and need to give them moral support,often accompany at their side.Give them love.Second,friends has given you a lots happiness and help,you need to return them（最好改为pay back).For example,if your friends have some problem,you need to help them and give them a hug.Give them moral support.I think it is(they are) good deeds about spirit.
Next,i will talk about the action style of good deeds.First of all,i think (用非谓语加个being） volunteer is a good thing.Volunteer can help a lot of people.For example,in this world,there are many people who are（去掉are） need of （去掉of）help.Volunteer often help these people,give them some foods or water.Second,volunteer can make people happy and relax（改为feel relaxed）.For example,volunteer often show（改为organize） some interesting programs,these programs would make people happy and relaxed.In addition,i think charitable organization(最好改为charity organization） is another good thing about action.First,the charitable organization can help poor people and give poor people new home.For example many poor people don't have the money to cure disease,the charitable organization always given（改为give） this（改为these） people money and help them find hospital.Second,the charitable organizations often give poor people new home.For example,in Africa,a lot of the poor people,charitable organization often give their help,help them find their own family,helping them to build their own home.（最后一句话For example,in Africa,a lot of the poors who can receive help from charity organization,then they can build their own family.)

好长阿。。累死我了。
(in) this world there are a lot of good deeds, some people think that spirit is a kind of good deed, (the other) people think that action is a kind of good deed. Today, i will talk (som...

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好长阿。。累死我了。
(in) this world there are a lot of good deeds, some people think that spirit is a kind of good deed, (the other) people think that action is a kind of good deed. Today, i will talk (something) about good deeds. In my opinion, i think good deeds (include) two styles (,) spirit and action.
To (start) with, a good deed is a kind of spirit. First, smile is very important (things去掉), everyone can smile,（ a去掉） smile is a wonderful (thing). For example, if you want to talk about business, smile would make people (relaxed) (and) promote the negotiations. The smile (is really) the benevolence symbol, the joyful fountainhead. Smile can let you (succeed), so smile is a good deed about spirit. Second, smile can (help you have a better) communication with people. Smile is the most amazing thing (in the world). If you always smile, you can make a lot of new friends, because smile is a kind of very good spirit exchanges. In addition, love is (another) spirit kind of good deed. First, the family has given you everything, you need to (love home as return). Friends (have) given you a lot of happiness, you need to (love them as return). For example, if your parents are old, you need to take care of them and (need to去掉) give them moral support, often accompany at their side (,giving) them love. Second, friends(have) given you (a lot of) happiness and help, you need to (love them as return). For example, if your friends have some problem(s), you need to help them and give them a hug. Give them moral support. I think it is good deeds about spirit.
Next, i will talk (something)about the action style of good deeds. First of all, i think volunteer is a good thing. Volunteer can help a lot of people. For example, in this world, there are many people who (are去掉) need （of去掉） help. Volunteer often help these people, (giving) them some (food) or water. Second, volunteer can make people happy and (relaxed). For example, volunteer often show some interesting programs, these programs would make people happy and relaxed. In addition, i think charitable organization is another good thing about action. First, the charitable organization can help poor people and give poor people new home. For example many poor people don't have (the去掉) money to cure disease, the charitable organization always (have) (these) people money and help them find hospital(s). Second, the charitable organizations often give poor people new home. For example, in Africa, a lot of (the去掉) poor people, charitable organization often give (them) help, (helping) them find their own family, helping them to build their own home.
To sum up ,in this world, a lot of people always do some good deeds, i think it is good .i think good deeds (include) two styles, spirit and action .i hope the people will do good deeds (and)often help (people) who need help.

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Styles of good deeds（好事的风格？最好改为type，类型，种类）
This world there are a lot of good deeds（改为There are a lot of good deeds in this world), some people think that spirit is a kind of good deed, some peopl...

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Styles of good deeds（好事的风格？最好改为type，类型，种类）
This world there are a lot of good deeds（改为There are a lot of good deeds in this world), some people think that spirit is a kind of good deed, some people think that action is a kind of good deed. Today, i will talk about good deeds. In my opinion, i think（I think 和in my opinion重复，选其一） good deeds have two styles like(like最好用杠代替） spirit and action.
To stare（start） with, a good deed is a kind of spirit. First, smile is very important things（去掉things）, everyone can smile, a smile is a wonderful things（单复数，去掉S，前面有a). For example, if you want to talk about business, smile would make people to relax(改为make people feel relaxed), smile will promote the negotiations. The smile really is(really放到is后面） the benevolence symbol, the joyful fountainhead. Smile can let you to succeed（let you to succeed有问题，Smile can lead you to success）, so smile is a good deed about spirit. Second, smile can batter（batter？benefit更好） communicate with people （此处加个and）smile is the world’s most amazing thing one（去掉one或者改为one of the world's most amazing thing）. If you always smile, you can make a lot of new friends, because smile is a kind of very good spirit exchanges(去掉S）. In addition, love is anther spirit kind of good deed. First, the family has given you everything, you need to return home（最好去掉home). Friends has改为have） given you a lot of happiness, you need to return them. For example, if your parents are old, you need to take care of them, and need to give them moral support, often accompany at their side. Give them love. Second, friends has given you a lots happiness and help, you need to return them（最好改为pay back). For example, if your friends have some problem, you need to help them and give them a hug. Give them moral support. I think it is(they are) good deeds about spirit.
Next, i will talk about the action style of good deeds. First of all, i think (用非谓语加个being） volunteer is a good thing. Volunteer can help a lot of people. For example, in this world, there are many people who are（去掉are） need of （去掉of）help. Volunteer often help these people, give them some foods or water. Second, volunteer can make people happy and relax（改为feel relaxed）. For example, volunteer often show（改为organize） some interesting programs, these programs would make people happy and relaxed. In addition, i think charitable organization(最好改为charity organization） is another good thing about action. First, the charitable organization can help poor people and give poor people new home. For example many poor people don't have the money to cure disease, the charitable organization always given（改为give） this（改为these） people money and help them find hospital. Second, the charitable organizations often give poor people new home. For example, in Africa, a lot of the poor people, charitable organization often give their help, help them find their own family, helping them to build their own home. （最后一句话For example, in Africa, a lot of the poors who can receive help from charity organization, then they can build their own family.)

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