请问这个英语短文有错误吗?The 2008 Olympic Games was held in our country.people from the world were flooded into our capital-beijing to attend this great sports meeting.The opening and closing ceremony of the Olympic Games was grand.51 gol

请问这个英语短文有错误吗?The 2008 Olympic Games was held in our country.people from the world were flooded into our capital-beijing to attend this great sports meeting.The opening and closing ceremony of the Olympic Games was grand.51 gol
请问这个英语短文有错误吗?
The 2008 Olympic Games was held in our country.people from the world were flooded into our capital-beijing to attend this great sports meeting.
The opening and closing ceremony of the Olympic Games was grand.
51 gold medals were captured by the Chinese this time.I think chinese athletes are very brave and great,we are proud of them,they are our heroes,we won the first place in the 2008 Olympic Games.
I think we should learn the spirit of persistence from them.
考试会写这个。
希望大家帮忙好好修改修改。

请问这个英语短文有错误吗?The 2008 Olympic Games was held in our country.people from the world were flooded into our capital-beijing to attend this great sports meeting.The opening and closing ceremony of the Olympic Games was grand.51 gol
The 2008 Olympic Games was held in our country.People from all over the world flooded into our Capital,Beijing,to attend this great sports event.
The Opening and the Closing Ceremoney of Olympics was grand.
Chinese got 51 gold medals this time.we got the first place in the medal count list.I think the Chinese athletes were great.We are very proud of them,they are our national heros.We won the first place in the 2008 Olympic Games.
I think we could learn the spirit of persistence form them.

1. the world 前面最好加上 all over
2. attend 最好改成watch，是观看不是参加
3. meeting 最好改成match,不用变复数，因为sports已经是复数了。
4. grand后面最好加个great,它不仅仅是壮观的，而且是精彩的
5. Chinese got 51 gold medals this time. 用主动句感觉...

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1. the world 前面最好加上 all over
2. attend 最好改成watch，是观看不是参加
3. meeting 最好改成match,不用变复数，因为sports已经是复数了。
4. grand后面最好加个great,它不仅仅是壮观的，而且是精彩的
5. Chinese got 51 gold medals this time. 用主动句感觉更流畅，另外capture 这个词有俘获，夺取的意思，有点贬义的感觉，不合适。
6. we got the first place in the medal count list. 不用反复重复olympic games 这个词
总的来说，语言比较简练，表达比较清楚，很不错，最后要注意大小写和符号就好了。

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不过就是个运动会，犯得着这么吹捧？

The 2008 Olympic Games was held in our country. People from all over the world flooded into our Capital, Beijing, to attend this great sports event.
The Opening and the Closing Ceremoney of Olymp...

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The 2008 Olympic Games was held in our country. People from all over the world flooded into our Capital, Beijing, to attend this great sports event.
The Opening and the Closing Ceremoney of Olympics was grand.
51 gold medals were won by the Chinese this time, I think the Chinese athletes were great. We are very proud of them, they are our national heros. We won the first place in the 2008 Olympic Games.
I think we could learn the spirit of persistence form them.
上海灵格风英语

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